Analyzing the Composition of an Ad

1st Rough Set

Here is my first set of rough drafts. At this point, I am figuring what doesn't work with the ads aesthetic composition as far as Sprint convincing the sale of the a cell phone.
The most prominent aspects of the small advertisement should be the Sprint logo and the phone image. The problem with the original is the competition between the text in quote in contrast with the product. Followed by it should be light supportive text to pitch the phone.